题型有：1. PART ONE 2. PART TWO
PART ONE
1． The software company you work for has decided to introduce identity cards for certain staff in your department.Write an email to all staff in your department: saying which staff will need identity cards explaining why the identity cards are needed informing staff how to get a card. Write 40-50 words.
正确答案：Sample AHi,As you know this department has increased a lot, because of that, we are going to introduce identity cards. Only the employees that entered in the department until 2008, will need this cards. You can get this cards in the administration department.Band 3All content points have been addressed, and the organisation and register of the email are on the whole satisfactory. The range of vocabulary and grammar is adequate, and although there are a number of errors, these are minor and do not prevent t
he message being clearly conveyed.Sample BDear colleagues,I am writing to inform you that everyone being involved in software development will need be provided with an identity card by the service team on next Monday. Due to stolen data the head office decided to prevent unauthorised access to data this way.Regards,Alex ThierryBand 4All points are addressed, and the register and format are on the whole appropriate. The range and accuracy of language are generally good, and the reader would be clearly and fully informed.
PART TWO
2． The retail company you work for is considering installing a TV system in its store to give customers information on products and services while they shop. You have seen an advertisement for a company which provides this type of system. Look at the information below, on which you have already made some handwritten notes.Then, using all your handwritten notes, write a letter to Chris Taylor at TVInfoSystems. Write 120-140 words.
正确答案：Sample CDear Mr Taylor,I’m writing to talk about my scheme of installing TV sys
tem project. As we know our company is a retail company, so how to attract more customs and how to satisfy the customs is something we should pay attension to. TV system can provide costoms not only the products information in our store but also the services. There’s no doubt that TV system can provide convenience and fun to all the people when they shop.At the same time, the TV system is also available for multi-screens. Normarly, it can get about 20 TV screens needed. So you can get anything you want from the TV.I know that the system provider also provide training service. They will train our employees to keep them in good scene of using the TV system in a timely manner.The important thing we might not forget is that the installing of the TV system should be ready in one month. As we cannot impact our operating, and we cannot close our store for long time. They may work overtime to install our TV system and keep it work properly.That’s all my thinking. I’m looking forward toyour replying.Best wishes!yours sincerelyHolly WhiteDec. 2, 2008Band 1Due to misinterpretation of the task, the answer contains irrelevant information and the reader is not adequately informed. Whilst generally being organised satisfactorily, with an adequate range of grammar and vocabulary, there are several errors.Sample DDear Mr Ta
ylorI am writing to enquire about your in-store television system we saw advertised in the latest edition of The Daily Mirror. We are a countrywide operating chain of sport shoe shops and are considering to provide our sales rooms with flat screens to entertain our customers and to inform them about our latest inventions.Due to the fact that we are going to launch a special football shoe next month, we would be pleased if it might be possible for you to install about 20 screens within one month. In addition, we would like to ask further information about your training lessons and we would be grateful if you could send us your detailed brochure as well as your price list.I look forward to hearing from you and I would appreciate it to receive your information in due course.Yours sincerelyChristian Van de WateringBand 5The candidate’s answer is effectively organised, covers all the important information clearly and contains a wide range of vocabulary and structures. There are few errors, and language is well controlled and natural sounding. The overall effect on the reader is very positive.
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